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How does facing and overcoming fears help people grow as individuals?

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Breaking our fear is good cause it allow us to experience bigger world. After overcoming fears we can tell how far we can go and our comfort zone becomes bigger. For example, if we conquer our fear of talking English, we can experience much more things.
However, when we face our fear and couldn't overcome it, the fear can grow. The reason why we should face our fear eventhough the possibility of even worse situation is that we can clarify our limits. It is first step of overcoming fear. So facing and overcoming fear are both important.

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Hi Hwang Seong Eun, 

Your essay beautifully captures the essence of facing and conquering our fears. Overcoming our fears expands our horizons, pushing us beyond our comfort zones and allowing us to discover our true potential. It's commendable how you emphasized that even if we can't conquer our fears immediately, facing them is still a crucial step in understanding our limits. Keep embracing challenges and continue on your journey of personal growth! 

~Teacher Cathy 

 

Breaking our fear is good cause it allow us to experience bigger world.  

>>Breaking our fear is good because it allows us to experience a bigger world. 

After overcoming fears we can tell how far we can go and our comfort zone becomes bigger.  

>>CORRECT 

OR>>After overcoming fears, we can determine how far we can go, and our comfort zone becomes bigger. 

For example, if we conquer our fear of talking English, we can experience much more things. 

>>For example, if we conquer our fear of speaking English, we can experience much more things. 

However, when we face our fear and couldn't overcome it, the fear can grow.  

>>However, when we face our fear and can't overcome it, the fear can grow.  

The reason why we should face our fear eventhough the possibility of even worse situation is that we can clarify our limits.  

>>The reason why we should face our fear even though the possibility of an even worse situation is that we can clarify our limits.  

It is first step of overcoming fear.  

>>It is the first step of overcoming fear. 

So facing and overcoming fear are both important. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>Facing and conquering fear hold equal significance. 

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