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What health problems do you worry about most?

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Actually, I'm more worried about my mom's health than my health.
I think my mom"s health is bad because my mom doesn't eat well because she's working.
But she always say me to eat food well but my mom dosen't eat well.
so I always worry my mom's health.

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Hi Sunny!
Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
I'm glad that you are becoming more comfortable with the use of your words.
This will be really good for you in the long run.
That's why, you have to be consistent in your practice.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Actually, I'm more worried about my mom's health than my health.
>> Correct
I think my mom"s health is bad because my mom doesn't eat well because she's working.
>> I think my mom's health is bad because my mom doesn't eat well because she's working.
But she always say me to eat food well but my mom dosen't eat well.
>> However, my mom always tells me to eat well but she  doesn't do the same.
so I always worry my mom's health.
>> That's why I always worry about my mom's health.
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