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If a person takes a photo of you without getting your permission, what will you do?

작성자: 박*호
2024-03-13 1110

회원님의 영작문

In Korea, a long time ago, the private lives of others especially women were secretly filmed and spread widely through social media, which was resulted in cases of people suffering from social phobia, depression, and even committing suicide, and causing a huge social argument.
Accordingly, the Korean government has enacted related laws that define such acts as crimes and severely punish them.
and although it is strictly applied to the general public like me, it is applied more flexibly to public figures such as politicians and celebrities.
Therefore, in Korea these days, the practice of taking pictures without the person's permission that we call a hidden camera has almost disappeared.
Still, if someone takes a picture of me without my permission, I will ask the person who took my pictures the reason.
and if there is an unfair intention such as for commercial purposes, I will ask for the picture to be deleted and an apology.
If the intention is pure, I will allow it.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello there, Sun! 

If you see someone taking your photo without your permission, it's your right to ask him or her to stop. If you're undressed and someone is taking your photo, put in a call to the police. Not only are you making sure your rights are intact, you're also making the dressing room a little safer for the rest of the world.

- Khristine ^^ 

In Korea, a long time ago, the private lives of others especially women were secretly filmed and spread widely through social media, which was resulted in cases of people suffering from social phobia, depression, and even committing suicide, and causing a huge social argument.
>> In Korea, a long time ago, the private lives of others, especially women, were secretly filmed and spread widely through social media, which resulted in cases of people suffering from social phobia, depression, and even committing suicide, causing a huge social argument.
Accordingly, the Korean government has enacted related laws that define such acts as crimes and severely punish them.
>> Correct. 
Or >> As a result, the Korean government has implemented laws that identify these kinds of behaviors as crimes and impose harsh penalties.
and although it is strictly applied to the general public like me, it is applied more flexibly to public figures such as politicians and celebrities.
>> While it is strictly applicable to ordinary people like me, it's more leniently imposed on prominent people like politicians and celebrities.
Therefore, in Korea these days, the practice of taking pictures without the person's permission that we call a hidden camera has almost disappeared.
>> Therefore, in Korea these days, the practice of taking pictures without the person's permission, which we call a hidden camera, has almost disappeared.
Still, if someone takes a picture of me without my permission, I will ask the person who took my pictures the reason.
>> Nevertheless, if someone takes a photo of me without my consent, I will find out why they did it.
and if there is an unfair intention such as for commercial purposes, I will ask for the picture to be deleted and an apology.
>> I will request that the picture be taken down and an apology given if there is an inappropriate intention, such as for commercial purpose.
If the intention is pure, I will allow it.
>> Correct. 
Or >> I will permit it if it occurs with good intentions.
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