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Does the weather affect your mood? Please explain.

작성자: 최*훈
2024-03-12 1051

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My mood is affected by weather. Especially, I feel a lot worse on a rainy day than sunny day when I go to the math academy in weekend. It doesn't mean that I hate a rainy day. Actually, I like to see the rain inside on the bed, not outside. However, when I have to go out, I don't like the rain because it's awkward and clammy so I can't move easily as usually I do. Furthermore, I have to bring my umbrella to shut out the rain. That's why I feel bad on a rainy day. In contrast, I feel happy even if I don't do anything that makes me happy on a sunny day. I want to go out anywhere and I have full of hope in my thoughts. Even if It's the day I go to the academy. The weather is important for me about mood change. Even so, sometimes I feel worse on a sunny day when I go to school on monday....because I can't get out in school.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hey Sarah! Thank you for sharing your opinion about this topic. I guess weather does have a huge impact on our moods.
~~Teacher Ryka^^


My mood is affected by weather.
>> My mood is affected by the weather.

Especially, I feel a lot worse on a rainy day than sunny day when I go to the math academy in weekend. 
>> Especially, I feel a lot worse on a rainy day than on a sunny day when I go to the math academy on the weekend.

It doesn't mean that I hate a rainy day. 
>> It doesn't mean that I hate rainy days.

Actually, I like to see the rain inside on the bed, not outside. 
>> Actually, I like to see the rain from indoors, especially when I'm in bed. 

However, when I have to go out, I don't like the rain because it's awkward and clammy so I can't move easily as usually I do. 
>> However, when I have to go out, I don't like the rain because it's awkward and clammy, making it difficult for me to move as easily as I usually do.

Furthermore, I have to bring my umbrella to shut out the rain. 
>> Furthermore, I have to bring my umbrella to shield myself from the rain. 

That's why I feel bad on a rainy day. 
>> That's why I feel bad on a rainy day. 

In contrast, I feel happy even if I don't do anything that makes me happy on a sunny day. 
>> In contrast, I feel happy even if I don't do anything that usually makes me happy on a sunny day.

I want to go out anywhere and I have full of hope in my thoughts. 
>> I want to go anywhere, and my thoughts are full of hope, 

Even if It's the day I go to the academy. 
>> even if it's the day I go to the academy. 

The weather is important for me about mood change. 
>> The weather is important to me in terms of mood change. 

Even so, sometimes I feel worse on a sunny day when I go to school on monday....because I can't get out in school.
>> Even so, sometimes I feel worse on a sunny day when I go to school on Monday because I can't get out of school.
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