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When one of my friends wanted to go to New Zealand to do golf, I gave unsolicited advice. It was even advice. I suggested that she should not go there because the country didn't have good golf fields. The suggestion came from my experience not accurate facts. I have been in New Zealand for a month. During the staying, I heard about the people's objections against building a big golf field. Actually the people don't want their country to destroy for any development. However, I checked the facts to realize that my advice was wrong.

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Hi, Gi Yean!
Actually, that's the scary thing about giving advice. Sometimes, we influence other people's choices and opinions even if it's just supposed to be giving an option or something for them to consider. This is the reason why sometimes, I hesitate to give advice.
- T. Caitlyn
When one of my friends wanted to go to New Zealand to do golf, I gave unsolicited advice. 
>> CORRECT
>> OR: When one of my friends wanted to go to New Zealand to play golf, I gave an unsolicited advice.
It was even advice. 
>> It wasn't even an advice.
I suggested that she should not go there because the country didn't have good golf fields. 
>> CORRECT
The suggestion came from my experience not accurate facts. 
>> The suggestion was based on my experience, not on accurate facts.
I have been in New Zealand for a month. 
>> CORRECT
During the staying, I heard about the people's objections against building a big golf field. 
>> During my stay, I heard about people's objections to building a large golf field.
Actually the people don't want their country to destroy for any development. 
>> Actually, the people don't want their country to be destroyed for any development.
However, I checked the facts to realize that my advice was wrong.
>> CORRECT
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