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I think expensive clothes can make peaple be attractive. But it just makes more attractive. It is more important who is he or she. Peaple have to have good personarity. If they are strange or bad it is not important to wear expensive clothes. If they are good or nice wearing expensive clothes can help them look more attractive.

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Hello, Henry!
I appreciate your perspective. It's true that expensive clothes can enhance someone's appearance, but it's important to remember that true attractiveness comes from within. A person's character and personality are far more important than their outward appearance. Regardless of what someone wears, being kind, respectful, and genuine are qualities that truly make a person attractive.
~ Teacher Maxine

I think expensive clothes can make peaple be attractive. But it just makes more attractive. 
>> I think expensive clothes can make people appear more attractive, but it only enhances their appearance. 

It is more important who is he or she. 
>> What's more important is who they are as a person. 

Peaple have to have good personarity. 
>> People need to have a good personality. 

If they are strange or bad it is not important to wear expensive clothes.
>> If they are strange or unpleasant, it doesn't matter if they wear expensive clothes. 

If they are good or nice wearing expensive clothes can help them look more attractive.
>> On the other hand, if they are kind or pleasant, wearing expensive clothes can help them look more attractive.
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