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Why do other people find it hard to apologize and admit their mistakes?

작성자: 이*윤
2024-03-08 821

회원님의 영작문

I think Koreans find it difficult ot apologize and admit their mistakes in society.
There also seems to be a lot of negative perceptions of the that.
This is because mistakes come with strong criticism and big responsibility.
If you did something wrong, you might have to take responsibility for resigning, including salary cuts and missed promotions, following criticism that you can't handle at once.
It is also designed in a unreasonable structure in which if you do something wrong, you aren't responsible alone, but the entire team is responsible together.
Nowdays, with the development of the Internet, the news becomes widespread, and you become a person who has done a big mistake without knowing it.
Therefore, if you apologize and admit your mistake, you may find it more difficult to admit it because you think about the disadvantages that will follow you.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Yun!
I must mention that you provided a really accurate response to my questions. I feel that criticism is one of the factors that prevents us from admitting mistakes. Small mistakes can become a global hot subject, especially with the advent of social media platforms. And, unfortunately, some people can recognize their mistakes while others refuse to accept modest apologies, denying people a second chance to do better the second time around... People must be kinder these days...
Chammy
I think Koreans find it difficult ot apologize and admit their mistakes in society.
>>I think Koreans find it difficult to apologize and admit their mistakes in society
There also seems to be a lot of negative perceptions of the that.
>>There also seem to be a lot of negative perceptions of that.
This is because mistakes come with strong criticism and big responsibility.
If you did something wrong, you might have to take responsibility for resigning, including salary cuts and missed promotions, following criticism that you can't handle at once.
>>Correct
It is also designed in a unreasonable structure in which if you do something wrong, you aren't responsible alone, but the entire team is responsible together.
>>It is also designed in an unreasonable structure in which if you do something wrong, you aren't responsible alone, but the entire team is responsible together.
Nowdays, with the development of the Internet, the news becomes widespread, and you become a person who has done a big mistake without knowing it.
>>Nowadays, with the development of the Internet, the news has become widespread, and you become a person who has made a big mistake without knowing it.
Therefore, if you apologize and admit your mistake, you may find it more difficult to admit it because you think about the disadvantages that will follow you.
>>Correct
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