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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you think it's okay to play/ get soaked in the rain?

Strangely, I remember that the days when I soaked in the rain.
For example, when I plat soccer in the rain with my friends or sometimes I experienced my clothes and bag packs wet the rain because I forget bring the umbrella.
And I had a lot of other memorable.
So I very sometimes enjoy getting rain.
But, actually most Korean people hate the get rained.
The reason is that there is a superstition only in Korea.
The superstition content is " when you get rained your head, you will get hair loss."
So on the rainy day, many Korean people who don't have umbrella, we have to cover hair even though don't cover their clothes and bodies.
In fact, it doesn't matter get rained and hair loss.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you think it's okay to play/ get soaked in the rain?


Strangely, I remember that the days when I soaked in the rain.
>> Strangely, I remember that the days when I get soaked in the rain.
For example, when I plat soccer in the rain with my friends or sometimes I experienced my clothes and bag packs wet the rain because I forget bring the umbrella.
>> For example, when I play soccer in the rain with my friends or sometimes I experience my clothes and bagpack get wet because I forget to bring an umbrella.
And I had a lot of other memorable.
>> And I had a lot of other good memories.
So I very sometimes enjoy getting rain.
>> So sometimes, I quite enjoy getting wet in the rain.
But, actually most Korean people hate the get rained.
>> But, actually, most Korean people hate getting wet because of the rain.
OR >> But, actually, most Koreans hate getting wet because of the rain.
The reason is that there is a superstition only in Korea.
>> CORRECT!
The superstition content is " when you get rained your head, you will get hair loss."
>> The superstition content is " when you get rained on your head, you will have a hair loss."
So on the rainy day, many Korean people who don't have umbrella, we have to cover hair even though don't cover their clothes and bodies.
>> So on rainy days, many Korean people who don't have umbrella have to cover their heads, and it doesn't matter if they don't cover their clothes and bodies.
In fact, it doesn't matter get rained and hair loss.
>> In fact, it doesn't matter to get rained on, or experience hair loss.
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