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a place I would like to visit in the future.

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I would like to visit Hawaii, which is one of the popular travel destination in Korea. I heard Hawaii is great place to relax. There are a lot of beaches and various water activities. I like swimming, but I had no chance to experience water activities such as snorkeling, so I thought I want to try them someday. I believe Hawaii is ideal to experience them. Even if it¡¯s not water activites, I¡¯m intersted in skydiving or paragliding. So, if I go to Hawaii, I believe that i can experience various activites with great scenery.

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Hey Iris! That sounds awesome! I hope you get to travel there real soon!
~Teacher Ryka^^



I would like to visit Hawaii, which is one of the popular travel destination in Korea.
>> I would like to visit Hawaii, which is one of the popular travel destinations in Korea.

I heard Hawaii is great place to relax. There are a lot of beaches and various water activities. 
>> I've heard that Hawaii is a great place to relax, with numerous beaches and various water activities.

I like swimming, but I had no chance to experience water activities such as snorkeling, so I thought I want to try them someday.
>>  Although I enjoy swimming, I haven't had the chance to experience water activities such as snorkeling, so I hope to try them someday. 

I believe Hawaii is ideal to experience them.
>> I believe Hawaii is an ideal location to experience them. 

Even if it¡¯s not water activites, I¡¯m intersted in skydiving or paragliding.
>> Additionally, I'm interested in activities like skydiving or paragliding. 

So, if I go to Hawaii, I believe that i can experience various activites with great scenery.
>> 
Therefore, if I go to Hawaii, I believe that I can experience various activities with breathtaking scenery.
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