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In what way is learning English an adventure for you?

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Learning English is an adventure in that I have to keep trying continuously for me. I have to do a lot. I have to work and play the role of a wife and mom. In this busy situation, learning english hard is that I have to live busier. As time is limited, we have to choose and focus on something.Otherwise, I can do everything by reducing my sleep time.
For this reason, I wake up early in the morning around 5 a.m. o'clock during the week.

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Hi Min Jee, thank you for working on your homework. Here are some changes for you to review. The sentences have been simplified for better understanding and rewritten for clarity. I've also made some grammar corrections. 
Sincerely,
^^ T. Ara

Learning English is an adventure in that I have to keep trying continuously for me. 
>>> Learning English is an adventure for me because I have to keep trying continuously. 
I have to do a lot. 
>>> I have many responsibilities—
I have to work and play the role of a wife and mom. 
>>> I work and play the role of a wife and mom. 
In this busy situation, learning english hard is that I have to live busier. 
>>> In this busy situation, learning English is hard because it means I have to live even busier. 
As time is limited, we have to choose and focus on something. 
>>> Time is limited, so I have to choose and focus on something. 
Otherwise, I can do everything by reducing my sleep time.
>>> Otherwise, I could do everything by reducing my sleep time. 
For this reason, I wake up early in the morning around 5 a.m. o'clock during the week.
>>> That's why I wake up early in the morning around 5 a.m. during the week.
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