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Nowadays, more and more people from different cities are spending more time away from their families. What are the possible reasons and the effects on the people themselves and their families?

I think traffic. Increasing of traffic became their family take away.
But it is so dangerous from them. It is not good for children.
If their father or mother isn't in their child, they maybe experience bad atomoshere.
It is not good for education.

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Hi there Lee! ^^  Thanks for relying on Power English to improve your skills. I see that you're always eager to keep your self on track.  Keep it up! 
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think traffic.
>> I think one of the reasons is traffic jam. 
 Increasing of traffic became their family take away.
>>> Serious traffic congestions will lead for families to stay apart. 
But it is so dangerous from them.
>>> But it is so dangerous [to] them.
It is not good for children.
>>>CORRECT~!^^
If their father or mother isn't in their child, they maybe experience bad atomoshere.
>>> If the parents aren't together with their children, they may experience loneliness.
It is not good for education.
>>> It is not good for their studies.
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