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Hi, Harmoney

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Hi,

I guess this is my first sending you an email.
FYI, I made a payment to extend my ENG class for another 7months.
I sent an email regarding my class time that I want to attend as same time as before, 21:30.

If you give me an topic then I will write you an email regarding the issue.
Let's talk about this thing on next tuesday.

Best,
Dylan

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Hi, Dylan! Congrats on sending your very first message/email to me.  Content-wise, your email is clear and concise. I appreciate that you've decided to extend your English class for another 7 months, and I've noted your preference to attend the class at the same time as before, which is at 21:30. Regarding a topic for discussion, I'll prepare something interesting for us to delve into during our next meeting on Tuesday.  Have a great and relaxing weekend~ 
~T.Harmony <3

I guess this is my first sending you an email.
>> ...this is my first time sending you an email.

FYI, I made a payment to extend my ENG class for another 7months.
>> CORRECT! (Just add a space in between "7" and "months")

I sent an email regarding my class time that I want to attend as same time as before, 21:30.
>> CORRECT!
OR>> I sent an email regarding my class time, stating that I want to attend at the same time as before, which is at 21:30.

If you give me an topic then I will write you an email regarding the issue.
>> If you give me a topic, then I will... ("If, then" statements are usually written with a comma (,) after the "If...,")

Let's talk about this thing on next tuesday.
>> Let's have a discussion about this matter next Tuesday. (Days of the week are written with the first letter being a capital letter. ^^)
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