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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you think is the most unusual pet that people have?

Many people are raising pets these days.
The most common animals in Korea are dog, cat, fish, and bird.
Even them, there is released "pet rocks".
Apart from the above pets, some people who has unusual pets.
Examples unusual pets are snake, lizard, and tarantula.
The reason why those kind pets are uncommon animals in Korea are that animals living in tropical and desert area.
So, it's not easy to see in Korea.
And actually, most people avoid these kinds pet.
I also, I can see and touch it at the zoo, but I don't like to raise it myself.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you think is the most unusual pet that people have?


Many people are raising pets these days.
>> CORRECT!
The most common animals in Korea are dog, cat, fish, and bird.
>> The most common animals in Korea are dogs, cats, fishes, and birds.
Even them, there is released "pet rocks".
>> Even now, there is also another kind of pet called "pet rocks".
Apart from the above pets, some people who has unusual pets.
>> Apart from the pets mentioned above, some people have unusual pets.
Examples unusual pets are snake, lizard, and tarantula.
>> Examples of unusual pets are snakes, lizards, and tarantulas.
The reason why those kind pets are uncommon animals in Korea are that animals living in tropical and desert area.
>> The reason why those kinds of pets are uncommon animals in Korea is because those animals live in tropical and desert areas.
So, it's not easy to see in it Korea.
>> CORRECT!
And actually, most people avoid these kinds pet.
>> And actually, most people avoid these kinds of pets.
I also, I can see and touch it at the zoo, but I don't like to raise it myself.
>> CORRECT!

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