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Having a pet is not an easy decision to make. However, having a pet always gives me psychological stability by having a family that can relate to me. Spending time with pets is also good for mental health as it can reduce anxiety and stress every day. On the other hand, hair loss can cause allergies, and there is a responsibility to take a walk every day. Also, there are difficulties when traveling or leaving the house.

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Well-written, Mia. Indeed, having a pet reduces our anxiety, however, it also comes with challenges that we have to face. ^^

-Khai

Having a pet is not an easy decision to make.

>> CORRECT

OR

>> Having a pet is a difficult decision.

However, having a pet always gives me psychological stability by having a family that can relate to me.
>> However, having a pet always gives me psychological stability because I have a family that can relate to me.
Spending time with pets is also good for mental health as it can reduce anxiety and stress every day.

>> Spending time with pets is also good for mental health, as it can reduce anxiety and stress every day.

On the other hand, hair loss can cause allergies, and there is a responsibility to take a walk every day.

>> CORRECT

OR

>> On the other hand, the hair fall of my pet causes allergies, and I always need to walk with her every day.

Also, there are difficulties when traveling or leaving the house.

>> CORRECT

OR

>> I also experience some challenges when I need to travel or whenever I leave the house.


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