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Discuss the importance of friendship in your life.

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In my life, friendship is quite important. It is like a spice in my life! It gives me joy and makes me feel my life abundant.
If my friendship is destroyed, I may not believe myself and many aspects of my life will be affected. Some people say 'never mind what others think about you' but I think that's nonesense as well as not a good way to improve oneself. I think it is always important to stay in the right point and ignoring other's opinion is not as right point as being conscious of their thinking too much. Maintaining a good relationship is similar. It means people see me as a good person( positive feedback) so I can believe myself more(Of course friendship shouldn't be the only reason we believe ourselves)and concentrate to my work more easily. That's why I think friendship is important beside from the joy it gives.

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Hi Seong Eun, 

Thank you for sharing your thoughts on the importance of friendship. Your analogy of friendship being like a spice in life is spot on - it adds flavor and richness to our experiences. Your perspective on the impact of friendship on self-belief and personal growth is insightful. Indeed, nurturing positive relationships can provide valuable feedback and support, contributing to our overall well-being and confidence. Keep valuing those meaningful connections in your life! 

~Teacher Cathy 

 

In my life, friendship is quite important.  

>>CORRECT 

OR>>Friendship holds significant importance in my life. 

It is like a spice in my life!  

>>CORRECT 

OR>>It's like adding spice to my life! 

It gives me joy and makes me feel my life abundant. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>It brings me joy and enriches my life. 

If my friendship is destroyed, I may not believe myself and many aspects of my life will be affected.  

>>CORRECT 

OR>>If my friendships falter, it could lead to self-doubt and impact various aspects of my life. 

Some people say 'never mind what others think about you' but I think that's nonesense as well as not a good way to improve oneself.  

>>Some people say 'never mind what others think about you' but I think that's nonsense as well as not a good way to improve oneself.  

I think it is always important to stay in the right point and ignoring other's opinion is not as right point as being conscious of their thinking too much.  

>>I think it is always important to stay on the right point and ignoring other's opinions is not as right point as being conscious of their thinking too much.  

Maintaining a good relationship is similar.  

>>CORRECT 

OR>>Maintaining a strong bond shares similarities. 

It means people see me as a good person( positive feedback) so I can believe myself more(Of course friendship shouldn't be the only reason we believe ourselves)and concentrate to my work more easily.  

>>It means that when people see me as a good person, it is positive feedback. I can believe in myself more. However, friendship shouldn't be the only reason we believe in ourselves; we should also concentrate on our work more easily. 

That's why I think friendship is important beside from the joy it gives. 

>>That's why I think friendship is important aside from the joy it gives. 

 

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