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Even if parents are definitely the first one who always stand up for me, my boyfriend is more relaxing partner who can talk together.
My boyfriend is so reasonable and logical that it is hard to gain emotional support in normal life.
However, because he regards me as a great woman by evaluating highly to my job and capabilities, he always said 'You did well', 'You can do it' when I made a decision.
I feel I'm supported by him since these aspects are suitable for me.
Particularly, when I have a difficulty about the decision, he often help me draw out priorities and choose best options by asking some questions.

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Hi, Ms. Yu Jin! It sounds like you have a wonderful support system! Having both your parents and your boyfriend as pillars of support definitely enhances your overall well-being. Thank you for this composition; it's always a good read for me.
~T. Jenna

Even if parents are definitely the first one who always stand up for me, my boyfriend is more relaxing partner who can talk together.
>>Even though my parents are always the first ones to stand up for me, my boyfriend is a more relaxing partner with whom I can talk.
My boyfriend is so reasonable and logical that it is hard to gain emotional support in normal life.
>>My boyfriend is so reasonable and logical that it is hard to gain emotional support from him in normal life.
OR
>>My boyfriend is so reasonable and logical that gaining emotional support in our everyday life from him can be challenging.
However, because he regards me as a great woman by evaluating highly to my job and capabilities, he always said 'You did well', 'You can do it' when I made a decision.
>>However, because he regards me as a great woman by  highly evaluating my job and capabilities, he always said 'You did well', 'You can do it' when I make a decision.
OR
>>However, because he views me as a capable woman, appreciating my job performance and skills, he always says 'You did well' or 'You can do it' whenever I make a decision.
I feel I'm supported by him since these aspects are suitable for me.
Correct, or
>>I sense a strong support from him as these aspects align perfectly with my needs.
Particularly, when I have a difficulty about the decision, he often help me draw out priorities and choose best options by asking some questions.
>>Particularly, when I have/encounter difficulty in making a decision, he often helps me draw out/ identify priorities and choose the best options by asking pertinent questions.
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