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I think money is important. But There isn't only important thing to buy something.
Sometimes, my father tell me that "If you chase only money, you be chased by the money."
Money is just method for buying something. If our mind be buried monetary factors, we aren't different from mechine.
Reasons that the world operate well are not money. At least i think so.
It is same to object. We have to consider many elements in merchandise.
If we buy only cheaper one. We may get bad quality.
When we buy something, we have to think many thing for example quality, volume, and after service.

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Hi Lee~!^^ I'm glad because you don't need to be required constant supervision and direct assistance with your writing assignments and you're unable to complete an entire assignment without writing errors. Keep up the good work!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think money is important.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 But here isn't only important thing to buy something.
>>>  But it isn't the only important thing to consider when buying something.
Sometimes, my father tell me that "If you chase only money, you be chased by the money."
>>> Sometimes, my father tells me that "If you chase only money, you will be chased by money."
Money is just method for buying something. 
>>> Money is just a thing to buy something
If our mind be buried monetary factors, we aren't different from mechine.
>>> If our mind will be buried by monetary factors, we aren't different from machines.
Reasons that the world operate well are not money. 
>>> The factor how the world could operate well is not money. 
At least I think so.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
It is same to object. 
>>> It's the same to the object. 
We have to consider many elements in merchandise.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
If we buy only cheaper one. We may get bad quality.
>>> If we buy the cheapest one, the quality may be bad.
When we buy something, we have to think many thing for example quality, volume, and after service.
>>> When we buy something, we have to consider many things for example the quality, volume, and after service.
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