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Do you think the Korean education system is perfect for society?

작성자: 이*윤
2024-03-04 1387

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Honestly, I don't like Korean education system and think the Korean education system isn't perfect for society.
Rather, I think there are more disadvantages than advantages.
First of all, Korea's education system is too grade-oriented.
Students are eager to improve their scores, and parents also demand high scores from their students.
Accordingly, private education enthusiasm is very high and students start to go to academies from a very young age.
Currently, few people don't go academies.
Schools have no choice but to manage their grades because it becomes the school's reputation how many students went to good universiries.
Also, universities in Seoul have become a good university, and have become a top rank in Korea social system, all students are trying to go to university in Seoul, which causes a serious regional imbalance.
I think as society develops the education system will change, but problems will continue to arise because it's not perfect.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Yun!
Do you know that there are a lot of Filipinos who admire your Education system? In addition, they used to say that most Koreans value the importance of education... On the other note, they wonder if you were still able to enjoy your childhood as you do a lot of things for your education. I must add that the competition among students is greater, therefore the pressure to achieve high grades is quite intense. Nonetheless, perceptions vary depending on the situation...
Chammy
Honestly, I don't like Korean education system and think the Korean education system isn't perfect for society.
>>Honestly, I don't like the Korean education system and I think it isn't perfect for society.
Rather, I think there are more disadvantages than advantages.
First of all, Korea's education system is too grade-oriented.
Students are eager to improve their scores, and parents also demand high scores from their students.
Accordingly, private education enthusiasm is very high and students start to go to academies from a very young age.
>>Correct
Currently, few people don't go academies.
>>Currently, few people don't go to academies.
Schools have no choice but to manage their grades because it becomes the school's reputation how many students went to good universiries.
>>Schools have no choice but to manage their grades because it becomes the school's reputation how many students go to good universities.
OR
>>Schools have no choice but to keep up their grades because the number of students who attend good institutions determines the school's reputation.
Also, universities in Seoul have become a good university, and have become a top rank in Korea social system, all students are trying to go to university in Seoul, which causes a serious regional imbalance.
>>Also, universities in Seoul have become good universities, and have become top ranks of the Korean social system, all students are trying to go to university in Seoul, which causes a serious regional imbalance.
I think as society develops the education system will change, but problems will continue to arise because it's not perfect.
>>Correct
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