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What are the causes of racism?

작성자: 이*윤
2024-03-02 1007

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강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Thank you, Yun!

You know, discrimination exists everywhere, and it is due to our differences. Some people believe that they are superior and better than others, which is one of the primary reasons why we live in such an unsettling world we fail to acknowledge that we are all different. :( I hope we become more understanding and courteous of one another. 

Chammy

It seems to be a very difficult and controversial topic.

I think it's for big two reasons.

First, I think it's because of historical causes or special issues.

For example, a country that colonized and ruled would be considered superior to that country, and some people may still be considered so.

Not necessarily, but the United States was a country that practiced black slavery, so they thought white people were superior to black people, and there seems to be a social idea that discriminates against black people because there are still people who think so.

>>Correct

I think COVID-19 is a representative example of a special issues.

>>I think COVID-19 is a representative example of a special issue.

At first, it was known that COVID-19 was created in China, so there were many sudden racist crimes, such as Asian people are assaulted in many countries.

>>At first, it was known that COVID-19 was created in China, so there were many sudden racist crimes, such as Asian people being assaulted in many countries.

The moment I think some people superior to any race, tragedy is likey to happen.

>>The moment I think some people are superior to any race, tragedy is likely to happen.

Second, I think it's because of negative images or preconceptions.

>>Correct

For example, some Koreans consider Chineses to be rude rich.

>>For example, some Koreans consider Chinese to be rude and rich.

This is because Chineses who came to sightseeing often showed thier rude manners.

>>This is because Chinese who went sightseeing often showed their rude manners.

That's why a negative image was created and based on it, Chineses began to be viewed negatively.

>>That's why a negative image was created and based on it, the Chinese began to be viewed negatively.

Also, because there is a preconceived notion that countries such as developing countries are poorer that Korea, foregin workers come to Korea to make money, and people think that workers are naturally from developing countries, resulting in discriminations and problems.

>>Also, because there is a preconceived notion that countries such as developing countries are poorer than Korea, foreign workers come to Korea to make money, and people think that workers are naturally from developing countries, resulting in discrimination and problems.

I think it's a little better now, but because there are still many issues of racism in our country, the problem should be taken seriously and the government takes countermeasures.

>> I think it's a little better now, but because there are still many issues of racism in our country, the problem should be taken seriously and the government should take countermeasures.

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