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It's my first assignment, so I'm not sure if it's right to submit it here.
But I'll use it here for now.
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You can live even if you don't speak English.
But if you know how to speak English in this global era, you can expand your scope of information utilization.
It is also helpful for watching the news or reading the instructions for overseas brand products.
Furthermore, there may be opportunities in your favorite field.

Of course, the interpreter's performance is good, but there is definitely a limit to noticing subtle emotional changes or nuances.

I like the saying, "You look as much as you know."
Likewise, reading, writing, and speaking English will increase the resolution of the world.
There are many colorful and beautiful things in the world, so wouldn't you be happy if you enjoyed them more?

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Hi Goeun, 

Your assignment is well-written and makes a valid point about the importance of learning English in today's globalized world. Indeed, being proficient in English opens up opportunities for accessing a wider range of information and communication. Understanding English can enhance various aspects of life, from watching global news to using international products. 

Your insight about the limitations of interpretation in capturing subtle nuances is astute. It emphasizes the value of directly engaging with English language content. Your analogy, "You look as much as you know," effectively illustrates how proficiency in English enriches one's understanding of the world. 

Overall, your assignment effectively communicates the significance of English proficiency in today's interconnected world. Thank you for submitting your assignment, Goeun! You've done a great job, and your essay is definitely in the right place. Your insights on the importance of learning English in today's world are well articulated. Keep up the good work! 

~Teacher Cathy 

 

You can live even if you don't speak English. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>You can live even without knowing how to speak English. 

But if you know how to speak English in this global era, you can expand your scope of information utilization. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>But in this global era, knowing how to speak English can broaden your access to information. 

It is also helpful for watching the news or reading the instructions for overseas brand products. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>It's also beneficial for watching the news or reading instructions for products from overseas brands. 

Furthermore, there may be opportunities in your favorite field. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>Moreover, there may be opportunities in your favorite field. 

Of course, the interpreter's performance is good, but there is definitely a limit to noticing subtle emotional changes or nuances. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>Of course, the interpreter's performance is good, but there are definitely limits to noticing subtle emotional changes or nuances. 

I like the saying, "You look as much as you know." 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>I like the quote, "You look as much as you know." 

Likewise, reading, writing, and speaking English will increase the resolution of the world. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>Similarly, reading, writing, and speaking English will enhance one's understanding of the world. 

There are many colorful and beautiful things in the world, so wouldn't you be happy if you enjoyed them more? 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>With so many colorful and beautiful things in the world, wouldn't you be happier if you enjoyed them more? 

 

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