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Spend six months in Canada

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I would like to eat maple syrup with waffle if I spend six months in Canada.
Because maple syrup is the most famous thing in Canada.
Also, I like it a lot, so I'll always eat it with other bread.
And there are a lot of autumn leaves in the street.
I would look around and see them.
It will be very beautiful.
Lastly,I would see Aurora in Canada.
It is also famous and my dream was that see aurora just one time in my life.

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Hi Julie! These corrections aim to improve the clarity, grammar, and flow of the original text. I hope it helps. Thank you!
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I would like to eat maple syrup with waffle if I spend six months in Canada.
>>> I'd like to eat maple syrup with waffles if I spend six months in Canada. 
Because maple syrup is the most famous thing in Canada.
>>> Maple syrup is very famous there, 
Also, I like it a lot, so I'll always eat it with other bread.
>>> and I really enjoy it, so I'd have it with other bread too. 
And there are a lot of autumn leaves in the street.
>>> Plus, there are lots of autumn leaves on the streets, 
I would look around and see them.
>>> which I'd love to see. 
It will be very beautiful.
>>> It will be incredibly beautiful. 
Lastly,I would see Aurora in Canada.
>>> Lastly, I'd want to see the Aurora in Canada. 
It is also famous and my dream was that see aurora just one time in my life.
>>> It's also famous, and it's been my dream to see it at least once in my life.
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