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As I told you frequently in class, I'm really into working out at a gym.
Because the gym has been closed for a while for renovation and the spring is around the corner, I'm trying to make good body shape.
Especially, I'm shocked that the pants, which was loose fit originally, didn't fit.
I've undervalued diet while I fell in to joy of eating in holiday seasons like new year's day.
Thus, I made a decision about losing weight as soon as possible by controlling diet and working out.

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Hi, Ms. Yu Jin! It's great to hear about your commitment to fitness and your determination to achieve a better body shape. It's understandable how holiday seasons can lead to enjoying delicious food, and I applaud your decision to prioritize both diet control and working out for a healthier lifestyle. Best of luck on your journey to achieving your fitness goals!
~T. Jenna

As I told you frequently in class, I'm really into working out at a gym.
Correct, or
>>As I've mentioned frequently in class, I'm really into working out at the gym.
Because the gym has been closed for a while for renovation and the spring is around the corner, I'm trying to make good body shape.
>>Because the gym has been closed for a while for/due to renovation, and with spring around the corner, I am trying to/determined to get in good shape.
Especially, I'm shocked that the pants, which was loose fit originally, didn't fit.
>>Particularly, I was shocked to find that the pants, which were originally loose-fitting, no longer fit.
I've undervalued diet while I fell in to joy of eating in holiday seasons like new year's day.
>> I undervalued my diet while I fell into / I indulge in the joy of eating during holiday seasons like New Year's Day.
Thus, I made a decision about losing weight as soon as possible by controlling diet and working out.
>> Thus, I made a decision to lose weight as soon as possible by controlling my diet and working out.
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