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Traveling to new places open people\'s minds to new ideas.

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I agree very much on the subject.
I think traveling to a new place opens people's minds or perceptions of new idea.
That's why people often travel to refresh themselves or to get new ideas.
To think about my case, I have traveled to Taiwan with my university friends to celebrate my graduation.
Until I went on a trip, I thought it was a similar country to China and a different country, but when I went on a trip, there were more Korean tourists than I thought and people were kind.
Above all, it was street food, but it was a country with many delicious foods.
Honestly, it was a country with a lot of negative images, but after traveling, the positive image increased, and once again, it became a country I wanted to go to.
However, I think it is also to travel to a new place that has a positive image and can turn into a negative image after traveling.

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Hello, Yun!
I must remark that traveling is expensive but worthwhile because it allows us to be open to new discoveries and experiences. I don't have a lot of travel experience, but my first trip was definitely refreshing and boosted my confidence because I was able to try new things. I hope we can have a lot of opportunities to travel hihihi...
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I agree very much on the subject.
>>Correct
I think traveling to a new place opens people's minds or perceptions of new idea.
>>I think traveling to a new place opens people's minds or perceptions of new ideas.
That's why people often travel to refresh themselves or to get new ideas.
To think about my case, I have traveled to Taiwan with my university friends to celebrate my graduation.
Until I went on a trip, I thought it was a similar country to China and a different country, but when I went on a trip, there were more Korean tourists than I thought and people were kind.
Above all, it was street food, but it was a country with many delicious foods.
Honestly, it was a country with a lot of negative images, but after traveling, the positive image increased, and once again, it became a country I wanted to go to.
>>Correct
However, I think it is also to travel to a new place that has a positive image and can turn into a negative image after traveling.
>>However, I think it is also important to travel to a new place that has a positive image and can turn into a negative image after traveling.
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