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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do people work long hours in your country?

Currently, the working hours in our country has decreased compared to my parent's generation, but I think it's still long hour.
In South Korea, normal office workers start work at 9 a.m. and finish work at 6 p.m.
But, this case only normal office job, most different worker start earlier, or leaves work later.
Typical places is marts, restaurants, and malls.
This because they's busy time in the late afternoon or weekends.
And for another reason is after the pandemic season.
After the pandemic season, average working hours has more increased.
This situation also too same in other countries, the price of everything more increasing.
But, almost worker's salaries are frozen.
So many workers make the money from working overtime or some people doing work two jobs.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do people work long hours in your country?


Currently, the working hours in our country has decreased compared to my parent's generation, but I think it's still long hour.
>> Currently, the working hours in our country has decreased compared to my parent's generation, but I think it's still long.
In South Korea, normal office workers start work at 9 a.m. and finish work at 6 p.m.
>> In South Korea, normal office workers start their work at 9 a.m. and finish work at 6 p.m.
OR >> In South Korea, normal office workers start working at 9 a.m. and finish at 6 p.m.
But, this case only normal office job, most different worker start earlier, or leaves work later.
>> But, in the case of normal office jobs, most workers start earlier, or leave work later.
Typical places is marts, restaurants, and malls.
>> Typical places are marts, restaurants, and malls.
This because they's busy time in the late afternoon or weekends.
>> That's because they're busy in the late afternoon or weekends.
And for another reason is after the pandemic season.
>> CORRECT!
After the pandemic season, average working hours has more increased.
>> After the pandemic season, average working hours has increased.
This situation also too same in other countries, the price of everything more increasing.
>> This situation is also the same in other countries, the price of everything has increased.
But, almost worker's salaries are frozen.
>> But, most workers' salaries are frozen.
So many workers make the money from working overtime or some people doing work two jobs.
>> So many workers make money from working overtime or doing two or more jobs.

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