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I think that's right. because there is a threat to wildlife, but the environment, temperature, and humidity of wildlife can be solved in zoos and managed without any problems with the health of animals.

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Hello, Jihye!
You made a valid point. While zoos can help manage environmental conditions for wildlife, we must also prioritize animal welfare and conservation efforts. Balancing these factors is essential for the ethical treatment of animals in captivity.
~ Teacher Maxine 

I think that's right. because there is a threat to wildlife, but the environment, temperature, and humidity of wildlife can be solved in zoos and managed without any problems with the health of animals.
>> I think that's correct. While there is a threat to wildlife, zoos can address environmental factors like temperature and humidity, ensuring the health of animals is managed effectively.
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