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The best thing about my grandma

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I think that the best thing about my grandma is her personality.
She is so mild that I rarely saw her angry. Also she haven't gotten angry when I joke or nag at her.
For example, sometimes I nagged at her about changing diper.
My grandmother always wear a diper because she can't walk herself, so she isn't able to go to toilet by herself.
I insisted that my grandma have to change her diper when getting wet, so I changed a wet diper storbbunly.
At that time, my grandma accepted my opinion and changed her posture that I could change her diper easily.

Although I have lived with my grandparents since I was born, I think that the relationship with my grandma is very unique.
Most of my friends say that they don't have bond with their grandmother.
Because of my grandma's mild personality, she and I could be a good friends in the world.

I hope my grandmother doesn't get worse, because we promise that she will live until she is 100 years old!

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appreciate that you've shared your personal relationship with your grandmother. Indeed, your grandmother will live until she¡¯s 100 years old! You have written a meaningful essay, Min! ^^

-Khai

I think that the best thing about my grandma is her personality.

>> CORRECT

She is so mild that I rarely saw her angry. 

>> She is so calm that I rarely see her angry.

Also she haven't gotten angry when I joke or nag at her.

>> Also she hasn't gotten angry when I joke or nag at her.
For example, sometimes I nagged at her about changing diper.

>> For example, sometimes I nag at her about changing diapers.
My grandmother always wear a diper because she can't walk herself, so she isn't able to go to toilet by herself.

>> My grandmother always wears diapers because she can't walk on her own, so she isn't able to go to the toilet by herself.

I insisted that my grandma have to change her diper when getting wet, so I changed a wet diper storbbunly.

>> I insisted that my grandma should have new diapers after getting wet, so I usually change her diapers stubbornly.
At that time, my grandma accepted my opinion and changed her posture that I could change her diper easily.

>> That time, my grandma accepted my opinion and changed her position so that I could change her diaper easily.

Although I have lived with my grandparents since I was born, I think that the relationship with my grandma is very unique.

>> CORRECT

Most of my friends say that they don't have bond with their grandmother.

>> Most of my friends say that they don't have a bond with their grandmother.

Because of my grandma's mild personality, she and I could be a good friends in the world.
>> My grandma has a calm personality. She and I could be good friends.
I hope my grandmother doesn't get worse, because we promise that she will live until she is 100 years old!

>> CORRECT


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