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Maintaining a good friendship seems harder than you think. However, in order to maintain friendship, we need time to talk, exercise together, and eat together. In this process, if there are more memories shared together, there is a reason to connect with each other.
There are people who hate me even if I'm good, while there are people who like me even though I'm not particularly good at it. I think human relationships are that difficult.

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Maintaining a good friendship seems harder than you think. 

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>> Maintaining a good friendship is harder than you think.

However, in order to maintain friendship, we need time to talk, exercise together, and eat together. 

>> CORRECT

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>> However, in order to maintain this, we need to have time to spend with our friends.

In this process, if there are more memories shared together, there is a reason to connect with each other.

>> CORRECT

OR

>> With this, there are opportunities to connect with each other.

There are people who hate me even if I'm good, while there are people who like me even though I'm not particularly good at it. 

>> CORRECT

OR

>> There are people who hate me even if I¡¯m kind to them, while there are people who like me even though I just show my usual personality.

I think human relationships are that difficult.

>> CORRECT

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>> I think human relationships are complicated.


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