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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you do to relax after working hard or experiencing other challenging or stressful situations?

Some days, we may be tired from using all our energy or we want to rest because we are received stress out.
On days like this, I just want and think to come back home and rest as soon as possible.
If I has a lot of tired or stress, if I do other things, I feel like it's not going as well as on the other days.
Even, some people have sensitive emotional reactions on days like this.
For example, they are easily annoyed by trivial things.
So in my case after all my schedules, I don't stay outside, and I come back home straight away.
And I go into my room and take a nap or recharge my energy with minimal body movement.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you do to relax after working hard or experiencing other challenging or stressful situations?


Some days, we may be tired from using all our energy or we want to rest because we are received stress out.
>> Some days, we may be tired from using all our energy, or we want to rest because we receive a lot of stress.
On days like this, I just want and think to come back home and rest as soon as possible.
>> CORRECT!
If I has a lot of tired or stress, if I do other things, I feel like it's not going as well as on the other days.
>> If I feel too tired or stressed, if I do other things, I feel like it's not going well as on the other days.
Even so, some people have sensitive emotional reactions on days like this.
>> CORRECT!
For example, they are easily annoyed by trivial things.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> For example, they easily feel annoyed by trivial things.
So in my case after all my schedules, I don't stay outside, and I come back home straight away.
>> So in my case after all my schedules, I don't stay outside, and I come back home straight.
OR >> So in my case after all my schedules, I don't stay outside, and I come back home right away.
And I go into my room and take a nap or recharge my energy with minimal body movement.>> CORRECT!

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