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What do you think of people who don\'t go to the dentist ?

작성자: 박*호
2024-02-20 924

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In the past time, there were many people who didn't go to the dentist and suffered from toothache, because there were few dentist.
But nowadays, I'm sure there's no one who can't get dental treatment because there's no dental clinic.
However, I guess there would be some people who don't go to tje dentist, because of the fear of dental treatment.
I don't think they are wise.
because it is clear that it will get worse if the toothache continues to be left untreated.
I'd like to strongly recommend them to go to the dentist and get treatment, emphasizing three points.
First, believe in modern advanced dental technology.
Second, as getting older, healthy teeth become more important.
Third, overcome the current fear of treatment by recognizing the intense desire to live a healthier life.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hey there, Sun! 

Neglecting your oral hygiene and missing regular visits to the dentist will cause the tartar on your teeth to grow bacteria and cause gum inflammation. Avoiding a visit to your dentist means your gum disease could go undetected which could leave you with long-term risk of periodontal disease.

- Kristine ^^ 

In the past time, there were many people who didn't go to the dentist and suffered from toothache, because there were few dentist.
>> In the past, there were many people who didn't go to the dentist and suffered from toothaches because there were few dentists.
But nowadays, I'm sure there's no one who can't get dental treatment because there's no dental clinic.
>> However, since there are many dental clinics these days, I'm convinced that most people receive dental care.
However, I guess there would be some people who don't go to tje dentist, because of the fear of dental treatment.
>> However, I guess there would be some people who don't go to the dentist because of the fear of dental treatment.
I don't think they are wise.
>> They don't seem wise to me.
because it is clear that it will get worse if the toothache continues to be left untreated.
>> Because it is obvious that if the toothache is not treated, it will only get worse.
I'd like to strongly recommend them to go to the dentist and get treatment, emphasizing three points.
>> I want to emphasize three things as I highly advise them to visit the dentist and receive treatment.
First, believe in modern advanced dental technology.
>> First, believe in modern, advanced dental technology.
Second, as getting older, healthy teeth become more important.
>> Second, as we get older, healthy teeth become more important.
Third, overcome the current fear of treatment by recognizing the intense desire to live a healthier life.
>> Third, overcome the current fear of treatment by recognizing the intense desire to live a healthier life.
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