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I think I'll make it as easy as possible for my family to live.
But I feel so bad about crime that I think the rules for murder and crime will be very strict
I just want to make rules to live safely and comfortably.

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Hi Da Hye, 

It's great to hear that you care about your family and want to make life easier for them. Ensuring safety and comfort for our loved ones is indeed important. It's understandable to feel concerned about crime and the need for strict rules to prevent it. Creating a safe and secure environment is essential for everyone's well-being. Keep striving to make positive contributions to your family and community! 

~Teacher Cathy 

 

I think I'll make it as easy as possible for my family to live. 

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OR>>I aim to make life as easy as possible for my family. 

But I feel so bad about crime that I think the rules for murder and crime will be very strict 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>I feel strongly about crime, and I believe that laws regarding murder and crime should be very strict. 

I just want to make rules to live safely and comfortably. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>I simply wish to establish rules that ensure safety and comfort in daily life. 

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