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I want to spend a day with Elsa in Alendelle town. Elsa is a fictional character of Frozen that one of my favorite Disney movie. Elsa has the magical ability to creat and manipulate ice and snow. Also she is a queen of Alendelle. I think It's beautiful town so I wanna go there in reality. Firstly, I'll visit the town and castle of Elsa in summer. And then, we'll go to ice link that she made so we can use it during summer. After we do skating, I talk to her about "Please make shaved ice with red bean for me." And we'll have a dessert time ! Then, I want to meet Olaf who take an umbrella with. Also, I'll meet Anna and Christof !! We have an amazing dinner in castle and a friendly talk time. It will be perfect day !

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Hey Sarah! I think that would be an amazing experience as well. It would nice to meet a Disney princess with super powers. Thank you for sharing your ideas. Keep it up!
~~ Teacher Ryka^^


I want to spend a day with Elsa in Alendelle town. 
>> CORRECT

Elsa is a fictional character of Frozen that one of my favorite Disney movie. 
>> Elsa is a fictional character in Frozen which is one of my favorite Disney movies.

Elsa has the magical ability to creat and manipulate ice and snow. 
>> Elsa has the magical ability to create and manipulate ice and snow. 

Also she is a queen of Alendelle. 
>>  She is also the queen of Arendelle.

I think It's beautiful town so I wanna go there in reality. 
>> I think it's a beautiful town that's why I want to go there in real life.
 
Firstly, I'll visit the town and castle of Elsa in summer. 
>> Firstly, I'd visit the town and go to the castle of Elsa during summer.

And then, we'll go to ice link that she made so we can use it during summer. 
>> Then, we'll go to the ice rink that she made.

After we do skating, I talk to her about "Please make shaved ice with red bean for me." 
>>  After we go skating, I'll ask her to make me some shaved ice with red beans.

And we'll have a dessert time ! 
>> That would be dessert time!

Then, I want to meet Olaf who take an umbrella with. 
>> After that, I would like to meet Olaf and walk with an umbrella.

Also, I'll meet Anna and Christof !! 
>> CORRECT

We have an amazing dinner in castle and a friendly talk time. 
>> We would have an amazing dinner in the castle and have a wonderful conversation.

It will be perfect day !
>> It will be a perfect day!
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