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What is your favorite amusement park ride? Why do you like it?

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My favorite amusement park rides are Dragons shuting, Bumper cars, very mini Zirodrope name He Nim Dallim and Marry go round.
First, Dragons shtuing is exiting, interesting and funny.
Second, Bumper cars are interesting.
Third, He Nim Dallim is exiting.
And Lastly, a Marry go round is fun and a little disy.
These rides are my favorite rides a amusement park.

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Hi, Henry!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Always do your best!
~ T. Camille


My favorite amusement park rides are Dragons shuting, Bumper cars, very mini Zirodrope name He Nim Dallim and Marry go round.
>> My favorite amusement park rides are Dragons Shooting, Bumper cars, a very small gyrodrop called He Nim Dallim, and merry-go-round.
First, Dragons shtuing is exiting, interesting and funny.
>> Firstly, Dragons Shooting is exciting, interesting, and funny.
Second, Bumper cars are interesting.
>> CORRECT!
Third, He Nim Dallim is exiting.
>> Third, He Nim Dallim is exciting.
And Lastly, a Marry go round is fun and a little disy.
>> And lastly, the merry-go-round. is fun but it makes me a little dizzy.
These rides are my favorite rides a amusement park.
>> These rides are my favorite rides in the amusement park.

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