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People are satisfied with their life when they
feel successful.
If I choose my job or hobby sometimes it can be a person. I think I have to do my best.
Working hard is important regardless of success or result.
Such that life can make me happy and I won¡¯t regret to my life.

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Great day, Ms. Sunny!
We all have ways to become successful, we need to work on our own to achieve our goal. Don't try using the ruler of success of the other person.
Have a good day!
Aki~

People are satisfied with their life when they feel successful.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >> Accomplishment and success make people satisfied with their lives.

If I choose my job or hobby sometimes it can be a person.
>>> Whenever I choose my job or hobby there is the influence of another person.

I think I have to do my best.
>>> CORRECT!

Working hard is important regardless of success or result.
>>> Working hard is important regardless of the result.

Such that life can make me happy and I won¡¯t regret to my life.
>>> Such life can make me happy with no regrets.


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