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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you think it¡¯s necessary to have a big celebration for every occasion?

Of course, I feel grateful and happy for the celebrates every anniversary.
But, in my opinion is that it would be too tiring to celebration for every anniversaries.
For example, in Korea, couples calculate the day when they start meet and some day is called an anniversary.
It often celebrates 50 days, 100 days, 200 days, one year, and even their Christmas, and Valentine's Day.
Honestly, I don't like celebrate these minor anniversaries every time, and I feel pressured.
Fortunately, this pressure wasn't just my idea.
And I think it's more important to maintain a good relationship on a normal days, except for anniversaries.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you think it¡¯s necessary to have a big celebration for every occasion?


Of course, I feel grateful and happy for the celebrates every anniversary.
>> Of course, I feel grateful and happy for the celebrations like anniversaries.
But, in my opinion is that it would be too tiring to celebration for every anniversaries.
>> But, in my opinion is that it would be too tiring to celebrate every anniversary.
For example, in Korea, couples calculate the day when they start meet and some day is called an anniversary.
>> For example, in Korea, couples calculate the day when they start meeting and for some, it's called an anniversary.
It often celebrates 50 days, 100 days, 200 days, one year, and even their Christmas, and Valentine's Day.
>> They often celebrate 50 days, 100 days, 200 days, one year, and even their Christmas, and Valentine's Day.
Honestly, I don't like celebrate these minor anniversaries every time, and I feel pressured.
>> Honestly, I don't like celebrating these minor anniversaries every time, and I feel pressured.
Fortunately, this pressure wasn't just my idea.
>> CORRECT!
And I think it's more important to maintain a good relationship on a normal days, except for anniversaries.
>> And I think it's more important to maintain a good relationship on normal days, aside from anniversaries.
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