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If people asks what was the best traveling did you have, I'm sure the answer is 'Canada trip'. I had have a trip of Canada with my class mates last year. Because school did suport the trip each major so we could go to Canada and Seattle.(But my best is Canada) It was my first trip going to foreign country with my friends. because of that, I was very excited more than I had a trip before alone. First, we went to Vancouver in Canada, but we didn't a lot of thing because we were so exhausted by the long flight time. I saw many maple leaf and beautiful nature so we took a lot of pictures. When I was in Vancouver, I got hooded t-shirt and souvenir of snacks like maple cookies. Also, I saw an old steam clock that I want to see before I had a trip. I can't forget it forever. And, we moved to Banff in Canada where I didn't know before. Banff is famous for bear, lake and mountain. I think the most of beautiful place is lake. If you search it on the internet, you can see a lot of beautiful lake.

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Hi Sarah! I'm glad you were able to share about your trip to Canada. It never gets old. I always enjoy listening about your trip to Canada since it was amazing and fun! See you on Tuesday!

~~ Teacher Ryka^^

If people asks what was the best traveling did you have, I'm sure the answer is 'Canada trip'. 
>> If people would ask what was the best trip I've been to, I'm sure I'd say Canada!

I had have a trip of Canada with my class mates last year. 
>> I had had a trip to Canada with my classmates last year.

Because school did suport the trip each major so we could go to Canada and Seattle.
>> Because the schools provided to support our trip we were able to go to Canada and Seattle.

(But my best is Canada) It was my first trip going to foreign country with my friends. 
>> (But the best for me is Canada) It was my first trip to a foreign country with my friends.

because of that, I was very excited more than I had a trip before alone. 
>> That made me more excited than I ever was compared to other trips alone.

First, we went to Vancouver in Canada, but we didn't a lot of thing because we were so exhausted by the long flight time. 
>> First, we went to Vancouver Canada but we weren't able to do a lot of things because we were exhausted from the long flight.

I saw many maple leaf and beautiful nature so we took a lot of pictures. 
>> I saw a lot of maple leaves and beautiful nature so we took a lot of pictures.

When I was in Vancouver, I got hooded t-shirt and souvenir of snacks like maple cookies.
>> When I was in Vancouver, I got a hooded t-shirt, some souvenirs and snacks like maple cookies.

Also, I saw an old steam clock that I want to see before I had a trip. 
>> I also saw an old steam clock that I wanted to see even before the trip.

I can't forget it forever. 
>> CORRECT

And, we moved to Banff in Canada where I didn't know before. 
>> We moved to Banff in Canada that I never heard of before.

Banff is famous for bear, lake and mountain. 
>> Banff is famous for bears, lakes, and mountains.

I think the most of beautiful place is lake.
>>  I think the most beautiful part is the lake.

 If you search it on the internet, you can see a lot of beautiful lake.
>> If you look it up online, you'd see a lot of beautiful lakes.
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