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Hello
If you like music, Can you recommend the music?
Homework
What can you do to save money?
My answer
I don't meet with my friends because I need to save money.

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Hi, Jae Hyeon!

Thank you for answering your homework!
I'd recommend that you listen to the band Coldplay. They have really good songs.
It will help you improve your English if you listen to English songs, as well.

~T. Divina^^

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1. If you like music, Can you recommend the music?
>>If you like music, can you recommend some?

2. I don't meet with my friends because I need to save money.
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