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Doing the same things and avoiding changes make people's life comfortable.
However, they keep people from developing, and leave people complacent.
People who always try to be changed can improve the satisfaction of their life by various experience

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Hi Ms. Sunny~!^^ Thanks for doing your writings! Keep having an impressive understanding and depth of knowledge as far as writing is concerned!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Doing the same things and avoiding changes make people's life comfortable.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
However, they keep people from developing, and leave people complacent.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR >>> However, they keep people from  [improving ], and leave people complacent.
People who always try to be changed can improve the satisfaction of their life by various experience
>>> People who always try changes can improve the satisfaction of their lives from various experiences.
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