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Describe a memorable holiday you have had. Where did you go? What did you do? Why was it memorable?

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I had a time with my best friend on Christmas,2021 before I had graduation of the middle school. It\'s the first time to have a time on Christmas with my best friend. And, so I was very happy about that. I can\'t think detailedly all about what did we do and go. We went to the city of Jeju where most people usually hang out. I saw a lot of people at there because Christmas is big holiday. Anyway, we took a picture of four snapshots of life that is famous in Korea so we do it whenever we hang out. Actually, I have a lot of four snapshots in my room lol. And then, we went back my home together for a slumber party. We made the tree of bulb and wore the headband of Rudolph !! It was typical christmas day by anyone\'s eyes. The day of holiday was perfect and good. However, I was so sad because my best friend was going to move to another area where isn\'t Jeju Island. It\'s ok !! we can meet during vacation.

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Hey Sarah! This was an awesome and sad experience. I hope you get to see your best friend more often. I'm glad you were able to share this with me. Have a great day! ^^

~~ Teacher Ryka^^


I had a time with my best friend on Christmas,2021 before I had graduation of the middle school. 
>>  I had some time with my best friend during Christmas last 2021 before graduating from middle school.

It\'s the first time to have a time on Christmas with my best friend. 
>> It was the first time to spend Christmas with my best friend.

And, so I was very happy about that. 
>> CORRECT.

I can\'t think detailedly all about what did we do and go. 
>> I couldn't think clearly about our plans.

We went to the city of Jeju where most people usually hang out. 
>> CORRECT

I saw a lot of people at there because Christmas is big holiday. 
>> There was a lot of people because Christmas is a big holiday.

Anyway, we took a picture of four snapshots of life that is famous in Korea so we do it whenever we hang out. 
>> Even with all that, we took four snapshots of life that is famous in Korea. We do that whenever we hang out.

Actually, I have a lot of four snapshots in my room lol. 
>> To be honest, I have a lot of these snapshots in my room. LOL

And then, we went back my home together for a slumber party. 
>> Then we went back home for a slumber party.

We made the tree of bulb and wore the headband of Rudolph !! 
>> We made some bulbs for the tree and wore a Rudolph headband.

It was typical christmas day by anyone\'s eyes. 
>> It was a typical Christmas day for anyone.

The day of holiday was perfect and good. 
>> The day of the holiday was perfect and good.

However, I was so sad because my best friend was going to move to another area where isn\'t Jeju Island. 
>> However, I was sad because my best friend was moving to another place outside of Jeju Island.

It\'s ok !! we can meet during vacation.
>> But, it's okay. We can still meet on vacations.
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