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Scientists make more contribution to the world.

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I think Scientists give us a more influence than politicians do. For example, If Edison didn't invent bulb, we can't live in the world like this bright shiny place. In addition to that, we can't study at night or have a conversation with friends all night. Therefore, it can say that thanks to scientists's achievements we can live a better world.

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Hi there Ms. Sunny~!^^ How's the day going? I hope you're having a good one! The holiday is just around the corner! I know you're so much excited. Enjoy the time!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think Scientists give us a more influence than politicians do.
>>> I think Scientists are more influential than politicians.
 For example, If Edison didn't invent bulb, we can't live in the world like this bright shiny place.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 In addition to that, we can't study at night or have a conversation with friends all night.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 Therefore, it can say that thanks to scientists's achievements we can live a better world.
>>>  Therefore, I can say thanks to scientists' achievements we can live in a better world.
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