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How has tourism in your country changed or improved compared to the past?

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Long time ago, my country wasn't develop that much compare to nowadays.
In my parent's generation, people focused on working and making money for their living, rather than traveling.
Due to economic growth, people spend more time to traveling.
Also technology and IT industry is advanced nowadays, people has a lot of informations even to the oversea country.
For this reason, still package tour is popular currently, however people choose different type of package tour which contains more free time in their schedule.
They can enjoy traveling by their taste with cheap flight and lodging budget.

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Thank you for this Rachel!

Long time ago, my country wasn't develop that much compare to nowadays.
>>>  Long time ago, my country wasn't developed that much compared to nowadays.
In my parent's generation, people focused on working and making money for their living, rather than traveling.
>>> correct 
Due to economic growth, people spend more time to traveling.
>>> Due to economic growth, people spend more time for traveling.
>>> OR: Due to economic growth, people spend more time traveling.
>>> OR: Due to economic growth, people spend more time to travel.
Also technology and IT industry is advanced nowadays, people has a lot of informations even to the oversea country.
>>>  Also, technology and IT industry has advanced nowadays, people have a lot of information even about the overseas country.
For this reason, still package tour is popular currently, however people choose different type of package tour which contains more free time in their schedule.
>>> For this reason, package tour is still popular currently. However, people choose different types of package tour which contain more free time in their schedule.
They can enjoy traveling by their taste with cheap flight and lodging budget.
>>>  correct
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