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How will you educate young people not to engage themselves on drugs?

A while ago, I saw a scary video on Youtube. It was documentary clip about Kensington road in America. There are a lot of people who are addicted at drugs on the road. What I was really shocked is some people totally stop there movement strangely. Even reporter touch them, they never react and blink their eyes, like a freezed person. This video is enough for warning the danger of drugs. I'll show this video to younger not to engage on drugs.

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Hello Geon!
Thank you for expressing your thoughts by writing!
Awareness of what is happening around you makes you more cautious. Just like what you saw in that video, you have this feeling of sharing with other people so they will not bother trying to use drugs.
Have a good day! See you in class.
T. Aki~


A while ago, I saw a scary video on YouTube.
>> CORRECT!

It was documentary clip about Kensington road in America.
>>> It was a documentary clip about Kensington Road in America.

There are a lot of people who are addicted at drugs on the road.
>> There are a lot of people who are addicted to drugs on the road.

What I was really shocked is some people totally stop there movement strangely.
>> What I was shocked about is some people stop their movement strangely.

Even reporter touch them, they never react and blink their eyes, like a freezed person.
>>  Even when reporters touch them, they never react and blink their eyes, like a frozen person.

This video is enough for warning the danger of drugs.
>>> This video is enough to warn of the danger of drugs.

I'll show this video to younger not to engage on drugs.
>> I'll show this video to younger not to engage in drugs.

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