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Describe your favorite place in detail.

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My favorite place is the sea near by my home. If you walk for 5 minutes, you can see my favorite place. The biggest reason why do I like this place is it's silence and calm so you can hear only the sound of the waves. It heals me and makes it disappear even when I'm stressed, so I can be stable. Also I can see the wonderful combination of brown and green because this place has a lot of reeds and grass. (Blue one is the sea.) Expecially . In summer, you can see the flowers !!Furthermore, I feel happy when I see the sun glittered on the surface of the sea. And I take a lot of picture whenever I go there. It's so beautiful. I think the most of people will agreed that, If they can see. However, sometimes It's hard going to there because It has a strong wind. Because of that, I recommend to check the strength of wind If you will go there.

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Hey Sarah! You did an awesome job! The pictures are great as well. I would love to experience a relaxing place like this one. I'd agree that this would remove all your stress. Thank you for sharing this with me! ^^

~~Teacher Ryka^^


My favorite place is the sea near by my home. 
>> My favorite place is the sea near my home.

If you walk for 5 minutes, you can see my favorite place. 
>> CORRECT

The biggest reason why do I like this place is it's silence and calm so you can hear only the sound of the waves. 
>> The biggest reason why I like this place is its silent and calm atmosphere where you'd only hear the sound of the waves.

It heals me and makes it disappear even when I'm stressed, so I can be stable. 
>> It heals me and makes my stress disappear which makes me stable.

Also I can see the wonderful combination of brown and green because this place has a lot of reeds and grass. 
>> CORRECT

(Blue one is the sea.) 
>> (The blue one is the sea.) 

Expecially . In summer, you can see the flowers !!
>> Especially during the summer you'd be able to see flowers!

Furthermore, I feel happy when I see the sun glittered on the surface of the sea. 
>> CORRECT

And I take a lot of picture whenever I go there. 
>> And I take a lot of pictures whenever I go there.

It's so beautiful. 
>> CORRECT

I think the most of people will agreed that, If they can see. 
>> I think most people would agree once they see it.

However, sometimes It's hard going to there because It has a strong wind. 
>> However, it's difficult to go there sometimes because of the strong wind.

Because of that, I recommend to check the strength of wind If you will go there.
>> Because of that, I'd recommend that you check the weather forecast before going there.
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