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Describe something you could never give away.

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I think it's a really difficult question.
The first thing seems to be health.
There is an old Korean saying that if you lose your health, you lose everything.
It seems that health comes first because people can do anything only when they are healthy.
The second is happiness.
These days, there are more mentally ill people than sick people.
I also feel depressed sometimes these days, and I think it is important to heal and find happiness by doing small but happy things.
The last is goal.
Goal is also important because it is easy for a person to wander if they don't have a goal, and only if they have a goal, they act as a driving force in life while making efforts

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Hello, Yun!
I was impressed with your answers. I must say that those really matter as we grow old and are something hard to lose. Woah! You did great :))
-Chammy
I think it's a really difficult question.
The first thing seems to be health.
There is an old Korean saying that if you lose your health, you lose everything.
It seems that health comes first because people can do anything only when they are healthy.
The second is happiness.
These days, there are more mentally ill people than sick people.
I also feel depressed sometimes these days, and I think it is important to heal and find happiness by doing small but happy things.
>>Correct
The last is goal.
Goal is also important because it is easy for a person to wander if they don't have a goal, and only if they have a goal, they act as a driving force in life while making efforts
>> The last is the goal.
The goal is also important because it is easy for a person to wander if they don't have a goal, and only if they have a goal, they act as a driving force in life while making efforts
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