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I think we have to do space exploration. Because we can get a lot of knowledges about science of space and we can get lots of resources from other planets.

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Hello, Henry!
I appreciate your perspective! Exploring space indeed offers valuable opportunities for expanding our scientific knowledge and potentially accessing resources from other planets. It's great to see your enthusiasm for space exploration and its potential benefits!
~ Teacher Maxine

I think we have to do space exploration. Because we can get a lot of knowledges about science of space and we can get lots of resources from other planets.
>> I think we should engage in space exploration because we can gain a lot of knowledge about the science of space, and we have the potential to obtain numerous resources from other planets.
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