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Good traditions

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How important is keeping traditions?

It is very important that to keep traditions. But
First, We have to think about right or wrong.
Let's we think about our traditions.
Traditions has variety good problem and bad problem. I think, it is not good that keeping
Every traditions. It is important that keeping good traditions. However, thesedays a lot of people do not think about 'what is important?'
We have to keep our traditions. But it isn't every
Tradotions. We have to development our good
Traditions.

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Thank you for this Sir Ko!

It is very important that to keep traditions. 
>>>  It is very important to keep traditions.
But First, We have to think about right or wrong.
>>>  But first, we have to think about what's right or wrong.
Let's we think about our traditions.
>>>  Let's think about our traditions.
Traditions has variety good problem and bad problem. 
>>>  Traditions have variety of good things and bad things.
I think, it is not good that keeping Every traditions. 
>>>  I think, it is not good to keep every tradition.
It is important that keeping good traditions. 
>>It is important that we keep good ones.
However, these days a lot of people do not think about 'what is important?'
>>>  correct
We have to keep our traditions. 
>>>  correct
But it isn't every Tradotions. 
>>But not every part of it.
We have to development our good Traditions.
>>>  We have to develop our good traditions.
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