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Would you rather die in 20 years with no regrets or live to 100 with a lot of regrets?

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I wanna die in 20 years with no regrets. Becuase of regrets is most cruel feeling that people can get easily. Although this reason, I can die with no regrets. That is attracted to me who I've been gotten feeling of regrets. For example, my hamster died when I was young because I didn't give water to hamster. So I have regrets until now about that. Like this, If all of my regrets is nothing before I die. I think that It's a very good so It doesn't matter about I die early. I think that It's more painful to live to 100 years with a lot of regrets. If I have a lot of regrets for 100 years, I'll feel unhappy in everyday because the amount of a feeling of unhappiness is bigger than happiness. It's just my thought, but It came(come?) from all of my experience. Also, my goal is the life of no regrets !

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I wanna die in 20 years with no regrets. 
>> CORRECT

Becuase of regrets is most cruel feeling that people can get easily. 
>> Because regrets are the most cruel feeling that people can easily experience.

Although this reason, I can die with no regrets. 
>> In spite of that, I can die with no regrets.

That is attracted to me who I've been gotten feeling of regrets. 
>> Unless these are experiences that have a huge impact on me.

For example, my hamster died when I was young because I didn't give water to hamster. 
>> For example, when I was young, my hamster died because I forgot to give it water.

So I have regrets until now about that. 
>> And so I regret that until now.

Like this, If all of my regrets is nothing before I die. 
>> Like this, I hope not to regret anything before I die.

I think that It's a very good so It doesn't matter about I die early. 
>> I think it's all good so it wouldn't matter if I die early.

I think that It's more painful to live to 100 years with a lot of regrets. 
>> I think it's more painful to live for a hundred years with a lot of regrets.

If I have a lot of regrets for 100 years, I'll feel unhappy in everyday because the amount of a feeling of unhappiness is bigger than happiness. 
>> If I have a lot of regrets for a hundred years, I'd feel unhappy for the rest of my life because the feeling of unhappiness is more than the feeling of happiness.

It's just my thought, but It came(come?) from all of my experience. 
>> It's just my perspective from my experiences.

Also, my goal is the life of no regrets !
>> Also, my goal is a life of no regrets!
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