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What does “financial responsibility” mean?

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회원님의 영작문

Happy Sunday. Chammy.
It is a good weekend today. I believe you are enjoying yourself.
We will have long holiday next week. So I must prepare everything before we are busy.

What does “financial responsibility” mean?
After being adult, we have many despite freedom.
The finance is one of the responsibilities the adult should have.
For example, they have to earn the money and have to spend it properly for their life.
The most important thing is spending the money as much as they can manage.
It is bad thing to spend money without plans. it causes a lot of debt.
If it so, it can make another debt again and has to get a loan from the bank.
On the other hand, saving the money in an account is really necessary just in case of an emergency.
And investment is also possible.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Han!
Based on my experience in the Philippines, I realized and hope that financial management should be taught in schools at a young age... Because the majority of students believe it is easy to make money. This allows them to learn how to value any amount.... :/
***To confirm, yes I had fun over the weekends, There was nothing special but I enjoyed watching Kdrama... :D
-Chammy
Happy Sunday, Chammy.
It is a good weekend today. I believe you are enjoying yourself.
>>Correct
We will have long holiday next week. So I must prepare everything before we are busy.
>>We will have a long holiday next week. So I must prepare everything before we get busy
What does “financial responsibility” mean?
After being adult, we have many despite freedom.
>> After being an adult, we have many despite freedom.
The finance is one of the responsibilities the adult should have.
>>Finance is one of the responsibilities the adult should have.
OR
>>One of the duties an adult should have is handling finances.
For example, they have to earn the money and have to spend it properly for their life.
The most important thing is spending the money as much as they can manage.
>>Correct
OR
>>For instance, to support themselves, they must work and earn money.
>>The most important thing is to spend as much money as they can manage.
It is bad thing to spend money without plans. it causes a lot of debt.
> It is a bad thing to spend money without plans. It causes a lot of debt.
If it so, it can make another debt again and has to get a loan from the bank.
>>Correct
On the other hand, saving the money in an account is really necessary just in case of an emergency.
>>On the other hand, saving money in an account is really necessary just in case of an emergency.
And investment is also possible.
>>Correct
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