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News should be immediate around the clock to bring the latest news to the viewers as soon as possible, so news always depends on TV or SNS because of its quick delivery of contents in the blink of eye. TV tries to manifest the main purpose of the programs with proper pictures or sound effect that it helps the viewers to know the main ideas intuitively.

But a book has different purposes and tools to convey main ideas compared to TV. A Book is more optimized to develop our ability to think critically rather than conveying the information. So it doesn't fill a book with pictures or sound effects. Rather, a book has an opposite approach to fulfill its purpose with pages full of letters. We can imagine related pictures or even sound effects that the book would make while reading it. We can create something new in the course of reading books. So reading books require much time to invest, but it is worthwhile.

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Hi Steve, I enjoyed reading your composition. It is clear and well-constructed. I just made a slight adjustment for smoother flow and clarity! Overall, you did great. I look forward to reading your other compositions. :) 
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News should be immediate around the clock to bring the latest news to the viewers as soon as possible, so news always depends on TV or SNS because of its quick delivery of contents in the blink of eye.
>> News should be immediate around the clock to deliver the latest updates to viewers as soon as possible. Therefore, news heavily relies on TV or social media due to their rapid content delivery in the blink of an eye.

TV tries to manifest the main purpose of the programs with proper pictures or sound effect that it helps the viewers to know the main ideas intuitively.
>> TV endeavors to manifest the main purpose of programs through appropriate pictures or sound effects, helping viewers intuitively grasp the main ideas.

But a book has different purposes and tools to convey main ideas compared to TV. A Book is more optimized to develop our ability to think critically rather than conveying the information.
>> However, a book serves different purposes and employs distinct tools to convey main ideas compared to TV. A book is more optimized to develop our ability to think critically rather than simply conveying information.

So it doesn't fill a book with pictures or sound effects.
>>It doesn't fill a book with pictures or sound effects.

Rather, a book has an opposite approach to fulfill its purpose with pages full of letters.
>> Instead, a book takes the opposite approach, fulfilling its purpose with pages filled with letters.

We can imagine related pictures or even sound effects that the book would make while reading it.
>> We can imagine related pictures or even anticipate sound effects that the book might evoke while reading it.

We can create something new in the course of reading books. 
>> We can create something new in the process of reading books.

So reading books require much time to invest, but it is worthwhile.
>> So, reading books requires a significant time investment, but it is worthwhile.

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