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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you feel comfortable attending family gatherings?

In my opinion, sometimes I feel comfortable attending family gatherings, sometimes I don't like it.
It because, a few years ago my family members had to participate in gatherings every anniversaries such as Lunar New Year and Chuseok.
But, after the pandemic season, we have gatherings once or twice a year.
The reason why sometimes I like family gatherings, I can talk to family members and hear their new update.
However, I don't like it these days.
Because, when I often meet my family member, we don't have title of conversation.
And some members, they feel stressed by their schedule plan.
The next reason is that I'm tired of too classical culture and the forces attitude manner.
Fortunately, my family try to out of the classical way on these days.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you feel comfortable attending family gatherings?


In my opinion, sometimes I feel comfortable attending family gatherings, sometimes I don't like it.
>> CORRECT!
It because, a few years ago my family members had to participate in gatherings every anniversaries such as Lunar New Year and Chuseok.
>> It's because, a few years ago my family members had to participate in gatherings every anniversaries such as Lunar New Year and Chuseok.
But, after the pandemic season, we have gatherings once or twice a year.
>> CORRECT!
The reason why sometimes I like family gatherings, I can talk to family members and hear their new update.
>> The reason why sometimes I like family gatherings is that I can talk to family members and hear their news updates.
However, I don't like it these days.
>> CORRECT!
Because, when I often meet my family member, we don't have title of conversation.
>> Because, when I often meet my family members, we don't have topics for the conversation.
OR >> Because, when I often meet my family members, we don't have topics to talk about.
And some members, they feel stressed by their schedule plan.
>> And some members, they feel stressed by their scheduled plans.
The nxt reason is that I'm tired of too classical culture and the forces attitude manner.
>> The next reason is that I'm tired of too classical culture and the forced attitude or manner.
Fortunately, my family try to out of the classical way on these days.
>> Fortunately, my family tries to remove the classical ways these days.

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