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I think online classes can be good way to study. Student can study everywhere they want, and study comfortably. But not going to the school is bad for students. They can't engage with many different friends.
I prefer going to school because I like play and study with my friends and I like study with reality teacher.

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Hello, Henry!
Thank you for sharing your perspective on online classes. Indeed, each approach has its strengths. 
~ Teacher Maxine 

I think online classes can be good way to study. 
>> I think online classes can be a good way to study.

Student can study everywhere they want, and study comfortably. 
>> Students can study wherever they want and study comfortably.

But not going to the school is bad for students. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> However, not going to school can be detrimental for students.

They can't engage with many different friends.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> They miss out on the opportunity to interact with a variety of friends.

I prefer going to school because I like play and study with my friends and I like study with reality teacher.
>> I prefer going to school because I like to play and study with my friends, and I like studying with a real teacher.
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